sábado, julio 02, 2011

Ejemplo de corrección de texto en "The Simple Present Tense"

TEXTO ORIGINAL DE UN ESTUDIANTE DE INGLÉS

My name´s Viviana , and I´m an Administration Assistant. I´m 20 year old and I'm single. I live in Santa Ana but am Moravian. I live with my boyfriend and we are very happy. I love my job, do it with passion, is my second home and not be like if I go there most of the day.

From Monday to Friday my day starts at 6:30 a.m. I get up early though my job is very near to my house. When I get up I take a shower only 20 minutes. From 6:50 to 7:00 I must be dressed and coiffed then.

At 07:05 a.m I have a breakfast, most of the time I drink coffee and cereal. I leave the house at 07:45 a.m, when I get my makeup to the office, because, I attend a lot of people so I like to look presentable.

I start work at 8:30 a.m. I like my job because I have others tasks for example, to purchase building material, maintain office supplies stoked besides, prepare employee payments and suppliers, and any other activity needing. 

At 10:00 a.m., I'm going to have a snack generally eat fruits, then at 12:00 go to lunch, generally do in the office with my coworkers they, are wonderful people, they have good sense of humor, and also good friends.

I try to schedule meetings in the afternoon to be made shorter, and also, like talk to people. At 3:30 I take a snack again, I u! sually take a tea and cookie. At 5:30 p.m I leave the office, this routine it's all Monday to Friday during the day but at night varies depending on the day.
 
Monday, Tuesday and Wednesday at 6:00 p.m I go to the gym, is a thirty-minute routine, but strong, the machine is air then, the effort is far. At 6:45 p.m. I come home and again I take a shower.

I prepare the dinner at 07:15 p.m. and the 8:00 p.m. study mi last class English. When I finished studying, I do clean the house a little because I like every clean for the next day. I like go to bed as soon as possible then, I try to be in my bed at 09:30.

Thursdays is different because I don't go to the gym. I go out with my boyfriend every Thursday, sometimes we go to movies, dinner, have a drink. He´s name´s Daniel, he has 31 year old, and he´s an Architect. He likes to cook but he don't cleaning to house so we split the housework. 

His family is from Cartago. He has 2 brothers but no sisters. We have six years of being a couple, and two years living with him, thank God we're doing well. 

On Friday nights I like going out with my friends, sometimes we go to a bar and sometimes w! e meet at the home of a friend but I can not be late to my house because I have to get up early on Saturday. The weekend I split the time between visits to my family, work and to rest.

My life is full of blessing. I have a family there love me, my friends respect me, and a job where valued me, so every day I wake up in the good mood to be a better person. I like to help people when they need.

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TEXTO CORREGIDO
 My name´s Viviana , and I´m an Administrative Assistant (clerk). I´m 20 years old and  single.

I live in Santa Ana but  I’m Moravian. I live with my boyfriend and we are very happy. I love my job, I do it with passion. My office is my second home.

From Monday to Friday my day starts at 6:30 a.m. I get up early though my job is very near my home.
  
When I get up I take (have also possible) a 20-minute shower.

From 6:50 to 7:00 I must get  dressed and comb my hair.

At 07:05 a.m I have breakfast, most of the time I have coffee and cereal. I leave home at 07:45 a.m.

I put on my makeup at the office, because I help  a lot of people so I like to look presentable (nice). 

I start work at 8:30 a.m. I like my job because I have to do many  different tasks for example: to purchase building material, maintain office supplies in stock prepare payments to employees and suppliers, and any other activity needed. 

At 10:00 a.m., I usually  have a snack, some fruit. Then, at 12:00  I usually  have lunch at the office with my coworkers (colleagues). They are wonderful people who have a good sense of humor, and are good friends too.

I try to schedule meetings in the afternoon so that they are shorter. At 3:30 I have a snack again, I usually have some tea and cookies (biscuits). 

At 5:30 p.m I leave the office. This my routine during the day from Monday to Friday, but at night it varies depending on the day.

Monday, Tuesday and Wednesday at 6:00 p.m I go to the gym. It's a thirty-minute routine, but a hard one.

At 6:45 p.m. I get home and  I take (have) a shower again. I prepare dinner at 07:15 p.m. and then at 8:00 p.m. I have my English 

When I finish studying, I clean my house a little because I like to have it  clean for the next day. I like to go to bed as soon as possible 9:30pm, if I can.

Thursday is different because I don't go to the gym. I go out with my boyfriend every Thursday. Sometimes we go to the movies or we go out for dinner and to have a drink. 

His name´s Daniel, he is 31 year old, and he´s an architect. He likes to cook but he doesn't like cleaning the house so we share the housework. 

His family is from Cartago. He has two brothers and no sisters. We have been a couple for six years. And we have been living together for two years. Thank God we're doing well!

On Friday nights I like going out with my friends, sometimes we go to a bar and sometimes we meet at a friend’s (house) but I cannot be home late ecause I have to get up early on Saturdays.

On weekends I divide he time between visits to my family, work and resting.

My life is full of blessings. I have a family who loves me, my friends respect me, and a job where I’m liked, so I wake up in a good mood and I try to be a better person every day.


I like to help people when they need it.
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6 comentarios :

Carlos Colonna dijo...

From 6:50 a.m. to 7:00 a.m. I must be dressed and coiffed then.


From 6:50 a.m. to 7:00 a.m. I must get dressed and comb my hair.

get dressed: vestirse
comb my hair: peinarse

Voyager dijo...

I must get dressed and coiffed, ¿no es correcto? ¿Por qué?

Mónica dijo...

Voyager: Buena pregunta.

No es exactamente que no sea correcto, sino que no es habitual decirlo así.

A veces, corregimos los escritos para adaptarlos al lenguaje realmente utilizado en este tipo de redacciones.

Saludos, M.

EL BLOG DE LA MALA VIDA dijo...

Shouldn't it be I'm 20 years...?

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Mónica dijo...

Mala vida: Oops. Errata. Sí "years" debe ir en plural. Ya está corregido. Ahora bien, puedes decir:

I'm 20 years old

o

I'm 20

Pero nunca poner sólo "years" porque no se entiende de qué.

Gracias.

Saludos

L u i S dijo...

No entiendo lo de: "He likes to cook", se supone que si el verbo "to like" va seguido de otro verbo, el segundo lleva +ing,¿no?. Por ejemplo, I like playing the piano.

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